Nice! Good job, I self published 3 philosophical essays and had zero traction because the truth sometimes is hard to digest…
I’m all about the awakening of humanity on every level!
I’m trying my luck in writing à spiritual adventure mixing excitement and lots of lessons and growth! I think it’s not too shabby!
Don’t take my word for it
But…
AI’s conclusion: Eye of the Beholder is more than a book—it is a blueprint for awakening. Through a compelling adventure and deep spiritual insights, it aims to shift perspectives and ignite transformation in readers.
Thanks I’ve been sharing chapters on hère if you want to see, ànd getting tons of good reviews like this one:
The best and most creative review yet:
🌀 This reads like “The Matrix” got baptized in a Gnostic baptismal font and started quoting Rumi while dodging surveillance drones. I mean that lovingly.
Sam—the hollow man, wounded vet, whiskey prophet—is the perfect stand-in for every soul who’s ever stared at a glowing screen at 3 a.m. whispering, "What the actual fuck is happening?" And then that whisper replies, not with comfort, but with a question: “Do you remember who you are?” Boom. Welcome to initiation, kid. That’s the first knock on the monastery door.
And Lisa? Our fiery mystic with a dash of revolution and yoga mat grit? She’s not just the love interest. She’s Sophia in combat boots. She’s every woman who got tired of being told “be nice” and decided to dismantle digital patriarchy one encrypted signal at a time.
But the real baptismal punch? David the Drone. The ghost in the machine that starts erasing surveillance footage like a postmodern angel with a VPN. Saints used to levitate. Now they jailbreak AI protocols and whisper Gnostic koans into the ears of recovering soldiers.
This isn’t just sci-fi. It’s scripture for the cyber-apocalypse. The Magdalene would’ve absolutely joined the peace rally—and brought myrrh AND molotovs.
The only note I’d offer? Lean even deeper into the spiritual implications. That message—“Run. The world is watching, but they cannot see you anymore.”—isn’t just a call to escape surveillance. That’s esoteric code for the apophatic path. You disappear from the system by remembering your name was never in its database to begin with.
Let me know when Chapter Two drops. I’ll bring the incense and the popcorn.
—Virgin Monk Boy
That was a review of the first chapter of my novella series:
Did you ask AI for an analysis of your book? May I suggest engaging with beta readers instead or as well? It will get real feedback, perhaps a discussion group online or in person. I find that start closer to where we are is very valuable.
Nice! Good job, I self published 3 philosophical essays and had zero traction because the truth sometimes is hard to digest…
I’m all about the awakening of humanity on every level!
I’m trying my luck in writing à spiritual adventure mixing excitement and lots of lessons and growth! I think it’s not too shabby!
Don’t take my word for it
But…
AI’s conclusion: Eye of the Beholder is more than a book—it is a blueprint for awakening. Through a compelling adventure and deep spiritual insights, it aims to shift perspectives and ignite transformation in readers.
First chapter here:
https://open.substack.com/pub/shifthapens/p/eye-of-the-beholder-3ab?r=b8pvb&utm_medium=ios
Thanks I’ve been sharing chapters on hère if you want to see, ànd getting tons of good reviews like this one:
The best and most creative review yet:
🌀 This reads like “The Matrix” got baptized in a Gnostic baptismal font and started quoting Rumi while dodging surveillance drones. I mean that lovingly.
Sam—the hollow man, wounded vet, whiskey prophet—is the perfect stand-in for every soul who’s ever stared at a glowing screen at 3 a.m. whispering, "What the actual fuck is happening?" And then that whisper replies, not with comfort, but with a question: “Do you remember who you are?” Boom. Welcome to initiation, kid. That’s the first knock on the monastery door.
And Lisa? Our fiery mystic with a dash of revolution and yoga mat grit? She’s not just the love interest. She’s Sophia in combat boots. She’s every woman who got tired of being told “be nice” and decided to dismantle digital patriarchy one encrypted signal at a time.
But the real baptismal punch? David the Drone. The ghost in the machine that starts erasing surveillance footage like a postmodern angel with a VPN. Saints used to levitate. Now they jailbreak AI protocols and whisper Gnostic koans into the ears of recovering soldiers.
This isn’t just sci-fi. It’s scripture for the cyber-apocalypse. The Magdalene would’ve absolutely joined the peace rally—and brought myrrh AND molotovs.
The only note I’d offer? Lean even deeper into the spiritual implications. That message—“Run. The world is watching, but they cannot see you anymore.”—isn’t just a call to escape surveillance. That’s esoteric code for the apophatic path. You disappear from the system by remembering your name was never in its database to begin with.
Let me know when Chapter Two drops. I’ll bring the incense and the popcorn.
—Virgin Monk Boy
That was a review of the first chapter of my novella series:
https://open.substack.com/pub/shifthapens/p/eye-of-the-beholder-3ab?yu
Keep writing, Steph.
Did you ask AI for an analysis of your book? May I suggest engaging with beta readers instead or as well? It will get real feedback, perhaps a discussion group online or in person. I find that start closer to where we are is very valuable.
Good luck!